Arctic Monkeys, one of the most famous, indie rock/post-punk revival band there is. They rose up from England, and they formed in 2002 in High Green, a small suburb in northern England. The band consists of Jamie Cook (lead/rhythm guitar), Alex Turner (lead vocals/rhythm guitar), Matt Helders (drums/backing vocals), Nick O'Malley (bass guitar/backing vocals).
Their band history is like a great dream for starting groups. Their first gig was at their city-centre, and from then on, they sparked. They weren't very advanced in their distribution, and they were very surprised to find out that someone had made a Myspace page for the band, giving out songs for free. The band was very happy, they were set off that their songs were free, because they had already given out discs for free at their gigs. They had signed many record deals, and one was a hit. One million euros.
Arctic Monkeys released their first album, Say I am, That's What I'm Not, released in 2006, and sold 363, 735 copies in the first week, and reached #1 in the United Kingdom album charts. Can you imagine that? First album, #1 on the United Kingdom charts, there has to be something in this band. I myself have been in a few bands, but none have been even slightly successful. The biggest gig that I took part in was at a friends birthday party. Since little people in the area like my kind of music (ska, indie, punk), it is extremely hard to form a band. All bands start out struggling, but this one band, exploded on it's first album. This band was highly criticized by many critics. The album cover shows one of the band members friend, smoking a cigarette. The critics say, this album cover is offensive and shows that smoking is ok. It's just a guy smoking a cigarette, are you kidding? Most people at that time in England had smoked cigarettes, and you call this offensive.
This band is very unique. Most bands rise up in different ways, but in summary, similar. This band on the contrary started up in a small suburb, and exploded in a months on getting a one million dollar record deal.
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Having spoken to you, it's clear you're a very bright kid with lots on opinions and good overall knowledge of the world around you. That being said, we need to find a way for you to express yourself more clearly in writing, because you're selling yourself short here. Your higher level thinking skills only sometimes come into evidence through this piece. Here are some sample sentences with potential, but small, medium-sized, and humongous errors crush that potential.
ReplyDelete1. Small error: "This band on the contrary started up in a small suburb, and exploded in a months on getting a one million dollar record deal." Should read: This band, on the contrary, started up in a small suburb, and exploded in a month, earning a one million dollar record deal.
2. Medium: "The band was very happy, they were set off that their songs were free, because they had already given out discs for free at their gigs." Should read: The band was very happy. They were not upset that their songs were free, because they had already given out discs for free at their gigs. Here, word choice is essential, because "set off" means the opposite of what you are trying to communicate.
3. Humongous: "Most bands rise up in different ways, but in summary, similar." That may be the worst sentence in the history of the English language. I can't even fathom where to start. Isn't it obvious that this sentence makes no sense? It makes you look like you suffered a major head injury halfway through writing it. Did you:
a. ski into a tree while writing it?
b. get sacked by a 300 lb linebacker while writing it?
c. get attacked by a police dog while writing it?
d. have a bowling ball dropped on your head while writing it?
I'm obviously poking fun, but holy cow! That's one awful sentence! Don't ever think that the reader will just know what you're writing about. It's your responsibility to convey a clear message.
My only question is what you meant by "put off." "The band was very happy, they were set off that their songs were free, because they had already given out discs for free at their gigs." Again, this is written pretty well and you display really good grammatical skills. I have to agree with Ferocious Bulldog about the "Most bands rise up in different ways, but in summary, similar." However, it's not as bad as he explains it as. The reader can figure out what you mean if they put quite some thought into it.
ReplyDeleteYou seem very informed about this band, though your commentary seems to be lacking. This post seems to be telling me facts, and although they are quite informative, I'd like to hear a bit omre of your own thoughts and opinions. There is the issue of that one sentence, brought up by Ferocious Bulldog, maybe you could clarify what you are trying to say?
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